Could someone correct my message ?

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Hello everyone,I'm French, but I'm looking for a job in a English province in Canada because I want to improve my English. I have to fill a mandatory to apply online for the job, so I hope some people can help me getting my answers straight and well spelled ! (my English is not that bad isn't it ?)OK, here it goes :"When I was working at the same fast-food restaurant since two years, it seems to me that the job couldn't offer me other challenges or chances to go higher and that's why I left.""I think that "Everything in the hostel seems perfectly professional, framed and cozy. The photos show the incredible view of the mountains from the hostel, which is very well-located in the town, near everything.""My current co-workers are seeing me as a smiling and helpful person, who loves to do her job perfectly. I think I can be a great member for the company because I am a hard worker, I am committed to my job and I am someone who is very sociable, easy to approach.""I couldn't have done better myself." Said by a manageress who usually don't give positive feedbacks."I used the Internet (especially the website) because the distance cannot permit me to come in person."

Clive · Accepted Answer

Hi,

Sorry, I don't understand why you are writing these sentences.
Are you answering questions? What are they?

Saying "The photos show the incredible view of the mountains from the hostel, which is very well-located in the town, near everything" does not seem to be something that will help you get a job.

Clive

Anonymous · Answer

Hi,

Yes, of course I'm answering questions. I didn't know it was obligated to see them to correct a sentence. I'm not sure of the place I post this topic, I'm sorry if it's the wrong one.

This is not my real essay, I've changed almost everything before posting it here. That sentence is crappy, but I just want to know if the grammar looks good.

Thanks !

Anonymous · Answer

Hi,

Yes, of course I'm answering questions. I didn't know they were needed to correct these sentences. And I don't know if I post this topic at the right place, I'm sorry.

This is not my real essay, but thanks...! I've changed almost everything before posting it here. I just want to know if the general grammar looks good.

AlpheccaStars · Answer

Here are some suggestions.
Regards, A-

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~~When~~ I was working at the same fast-food restaurant for ~~since~~ two years, and it seemed to me that the job couldn't offer me other challenges or chances for advancement ~~to go higher~~ and that's why I left."

"I think that everything in the hostel seems perfectly professional, framed (?) and cozy. The photos show the incredible view of the mountains from the hostel, which is very well-located in the town near to everything."

My current co-workers are seeing me as a ~~smiling and~~ helpful person, always smiling, who loves to do her job perfectly. I think I can be a great member of ~~for~~ the company because I am a hard worker, I am committed to my job and I am someone who is very sociable and easy to approach.

"I couldn't have done better myself." This was said by a manageress (? "manager" is both male and female. I've not heard it with the -ess ending.) who usually doesn't give positive feedback.

"I used your ~~the~~ Internet website ~~(especially the website)~~ because the distance does not ~~cannot~~ permit me to come in person."

Anonymous · Answer

Thanks AlpheccaStars ! I really appreciate.

Yeah, I wasn't sure of the word "manageress" at first, I thought it sounds pretty bad too... but I found it in a (very old I admit) dictionnary.

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