Complain letter- very urgent correction needed!
Could anyone check my mistakes?
Thanks in advance
In last week I have started work in xxxxxxxxxxx as a General Assistant on a nigh shift.
From beginning working conditions surprised me in a negative way.
Induction session and employers handbook are fictional comparing to brutal reality and it does not give you any reflection about working conditions.
There is not a place for rules or principles, further more you are unable to find xxxxxxx values such as “ Respect for the individual ”or liberality for the new employer.
First night my anonymous manager (he even didn’t introduced himself) gave me a target to achieve.
Target fixed for an experienced colleague accustomed working on night shift.
I was not trained enough how to work effectively and I didn’t reach my target crossing time limit for about two hours.
After that, when I had completed my second replenishing task, manager told me “you've done nothing”.
More over he said that he does not care that I am new employer and that it is my first or second night shift in my life.
In the past I used to work in xxxxxx as a general assistant/code controller and I know what hard work means and my attitude was appreciated.
Forget slogan “respect for the individual “- from the beginning I felt like an intruder, number without the uniform and possibility to take a brake according to my needs and the biological clock.
I have noticed that he treated me unfairly and in the different way making comments and comparing me to others.
Is this a normal and correct behaviour in this branch or on the night shift only?
I feel cheated, discriminated and being bullied.
I have heard from my manager that the time is my enemy and I need to work like a robot working and thinking being permanently late.
More over he said if I would not accept these rules there is no place for me on night shift.
I am surprised because my performance was not so bad and I did not work worse then other colleagues.
Maybe the nigh shift manager is unsuitable or there are not enough people in there?
I am very pleased you to watch CCTV recordings and judge my performance fairly.
After first two days doing a new job I felt sick.
According to company policy I called sick line and had informed about my situation.
Next day when I called again informing that I am still unfit to work in response the caller asked several questions: how long I have been in company, do I know anything about recession and how many people are loosing their jobs.
In addition my caller asked if I am not worry about my vacancy in xxxxxx
Is this a fair treatment or just simple blackmail?
How can he judge me not knowing the issue?
Why in a such short time I was treated so unfairly?
Maybe because of recession or because I am white or maybe people are not enough trained to be a managers and don’t care about employees and are thinking about the profit only.
Due to above circumstances I cannot work on night shift and willing be move on the day shift.
I appreciate your understanding and explanation.
Yours sincerely,
xxxxxxx
Top answer
1. you absolutely must paragraph- the only indication that this is a letter is the 'yours sincerely' at the bottom- you must lay this out in the correct layout of a formal letter 2. you cannot just state bluntly & 100% honestly what you really think- why you are complaining- I don't know how it is in your country, but in all english speaking countries I am aware of (and most western countries in general at least) you must be polite and give the impression you are sure/you have faith that the person who you are complaining about (whether it is the recipient of the letter or not)- of course you feel angry with these people, but the aim of your letter is to convince them to grant you compensation- and they won't feel like doing that if you are rude or aggressive (which is how this letter comes across) each paragraph must be: -clear -to the point strictly faithful to the facts what you can back up -argued convincingly -objective (don't let your feelings get in the way) don't rely on the reader of this letter to sympathise- appeal to reason, what should reasonably have happened, and explain clearly why you believe you have been treated unfairly
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2. you cannot just state bluntly & 100% honestly what you really think- why you are complaining- I don't know how it is in your country, but in all english speaking countries I am aware of (and most western countries
0it is generally a practice of formal english to understate:
I was very very annoyed- I was somewhat dismayed
I am furious with you- I must admit I am not happy with you
I hate that- I am not all that fond of that
if you express yourself clearly, people will understand what you mean, even if you understate your feelings and opinions
try and struct
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Will you be available on the forum?
Thanks
Demart
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email me when you have changed your letter as I suggested and I will correct it as soon as I can
0To Managers xxxxxxx
In last week I have started work in xxxxx as a General Assistant on nigh shift.
From beginning working conditions surprised me in a negative way and I was somewhat dismayed.
Induction session and employers handbook are fictional comparing to brutal reality and it does not give you any reflection about working conditions.
There is not a place fo
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