Manohonor Posted 22 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Check my essay please
Life in the 21st century
We’ve entered a new era: the twenty first century. Of course, it’s exciting and we are trying to predict what our life will be like in the future.
What will become of us? We do not know – but we can predict. I can predict.
Some are very optimistic, some are not. If you ask me, we must be seious about this. Let’s just assess what we may be facing in the future.
New war? That might be very likely to happen. Our main enemy today is of course China. This is the most dangerous foe now and if there’s a war with them – God forbid! – we won’t win – never. Their population is increasing every day, they’re outgrowing their territory and Russia’s under threat of their invasion. That is the first problem.
Optimists say our cities will become cleaner, greener and safer. I don’t share their views. The number of criminals is constantly rising, people’s health is definitely getting worse, man’s lifetime has got at least 10-15 years shorter and the pollution of the atmosphere has soared in the last few years. That is the second problem.
Dreamers say we’ll be able to travel in space, spend our holidays on other planets – but that’s so stupid. We’ve got enough troubles here, on Earth – we must solve Earth’s problems and then think of space.
The stronger countries try to get hold of the weaker one’s resources and that’s how wars between different states begin. When different people start fighting to come to power in one and the same country that’s how civil wars begin.
All types of wars are terrible in their own way, but in the future wars could be even more terrible than those we knew before. Nevertheless, I don’t think the nuclear weapons will be used – everyone realizes that means complete destruction and in that case the war won’t have a winner.
Okay, I don’t say the future will be devastating for us. I say that could happen if we do nothing. If we say: “Everything is all right, everything is all right” – nothing’ll be all right, if we say: “Here we’ve got a problem, let’s solve it; there we’ve got a problem, let’s solve it” then perhaps we’ll get a not bad future.
We’ve entered a new era: the twenty first century. Of course, it’s exciting and we are trying to predict what our life will be like in the future.
What will become of us? We do not know – but we can predict. I can predict.
Some are very optimistic, some are not. If you ask me, we must be seious about this. Let’s just assess what we may be facing in the future.
New war? That might be very likely to happen. Our main enemy today is of course China. This is the most dangerous foe now and if there’s a war with them – God forbid! – we won’t win – never. Their population is increasing every day, they’re outgrowing their territory and Russia’s under threat of their invasion. That is the first problem.
Optimists say our cities will become cleaner, greener and safer. I don’t share their views. The number of criminals is constantly rising, people’s health is definitely getting worse, man’s lifetime has got at least 10-15 years shorter and the pollution of the atmosphere has soared in the last few years. That is the second problem.
Dreamers say we’ll be able to travel in space, spend our holidays on other planets – but that’s so stupid. We’ve got enough troubles here, on Earth – we must solve Earth’s problems and then think of space.
The stronger countries try to get hold of the weaker one’s resources and that’s how wars between different states begin. When different people start fighting to come to power in one and the same country that’s how civil wars begin.
All types of wars are terrible in their own way, but in the future wars could be even more terrible than those we knew before. Nevertheless, I don’t think the nuclear weapons will be used – everyone realizes that means complete destruction and in that case the war won’t have a winner.
Okay, I don’t say the future will be devastating for us. I say that could happen if we do nothing. If we say: “Everything is all right, everything is all right” – nothing’ll be all right, if we say: “Here we’ve got a problem, let’s solve it; there we’ve got a problem, let’s solve it” then perhaps we’ll get a not bad future.
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In my humble opinion, there is very little wrong with this essay, as far as the English grammar is concerned. I would want to correct "The stronger countries try to get hold of the weaker one's resources", probably rephrasing it as "Stronger countries try to grab the resources that belong to weaker countries". The mistake is "one's", as this denotes a single country, and I am sure that more than one country was intended.
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In my humble opinion, there is very little wrong with this essay, as far as the English grammar is concerned. I would want to correct "The stronger countries try to get hold of the weaker one's resources", probably rephrasing it as "Stronger countries try to grab the resources that belong to weaker countries". The mistake is "one's", as this denotes a single country, and I am sure that more than
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Thanks a lot, Edwy, for rephrasing "coutries", really really thanks. As for "one's" and "ones'" I
just made a mistake which I didn't notice.
As to China... not to worl peace, to Russia... I'm really sorry for them. But... anyway thanks!
just made a mistake which I didn't notice.
As to China... not to worl peace, to Russia... I'm really sorry for them. But... anyway thanks!
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