Ilma Posted 15 years ago
Can you please give your opinion about my poem?
Tap, tap, tap
I heared some body's walking
It sounded so smooth
Among the darkness
Tap, tap, tap
The sound was getting closer
I felt cold
Tap, tap, tap
I felt so curious
Who was that? or,
What was that?
But when I walked to the sound
The sound was going far
And faded away
Tap tap tap
I realized whose step was that
that's my grandpa's
Tap tap tap..
Then my tears dropped
I heared some body's walking
It sounded so smooth
Among the darkness
Tap, tap, tap
The sound was getting closer
I felt cold
Tap, tap, tap
I felt so curious
Who was that? or,
What was that?
But when I walked to the sound
The sound was going far
And faded away
Tap tap tap
I realized whose step was that
that's my grandpa's
Tap tap tap..
Then my tears dropped
Top answer
Not enough information in it. 'Tap, tap, tap' is not so effective; it is just boring after the first verse.
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Not enough information in it. 'Tap, tap, tap' is not so effective; it is just boring after the first verse.
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It is not bad at all. You could also also say "But when I walked towards the sound". Also you could try to make some rhymes 
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