Can you please check out my English?

Tell my about yourself:
Hello. First of all I wanna thank you for giving me this opportunity to introduce myself. My name is Emily Brown. I'm 20 years old from Holland. I just got discharged from the army two months ago, I served as an adjutancy NCO; a role that required me excellent interpersonal skills, responsibility, diligence and coping with stress.

What are you strengths?
I am a team player with excellent attention to detail. I provide
personalized service to my customers while aiming to go beyond all
expectations and ensure that my customers receive the best possible
service. I also have the ability to adapt in a fast paced environment.'
What are your weaknesses?
I feel that my attention to detail is my weakness. I want everything to be
perfect. Sometimes I get so caught up in small details that I forget to see
the big picture. It was pointed out to me and I was able to improve
myself. I am now constantly ?nding ways to balance both the details and
the overall situation.

What are your hobbies?
Usually I spend my spare time by reading books, hanging out with my friends and practicing sports such as running and pilates.

How your friends would describe you?
Both my friends and coworkers would say that I am a reliable individual.
They all know that they can count on me to listen to their problems and
try to help them ?nd a solution.

Why should we hire you?
I look forward to making a career in an industry in which I can interact with and serve people. By being a flight attendant, I will get an opportunity to interact with diverse people and address to their needs. This will aptly hone my innate interpersonal skills.