Gemina Posted 13 years ago
Grammar
Can you help me to review this internship cover letter, please?
Gemina Mai
11 NZ Street
PN district, HCM City
November 27, 2013
X Hotel
23 HA Street
District 1, HCM City
Dear Human Resources Department:
I am a last-year student of Tourism Mannagement major at the Y University
In order to gain practical experience in a real environment and to apply the knowledge learned to life, I wish to perform a three-month internship in a professional five-star hotel like X Hotel. I would like to ask whether there might be a place available in the hotel from December 23, 2013 to April, 2014.
With knowledge about Tourism Management in Hospitality field in the university and the time working as a waitress at Z Restaurant, I am eager to contribute my abilities and experience to X Hotel. Besides, I used to work as a salesman at the Maxi Shoe shop.
In the university, I used to be the deputy of External Relations Department of Travel Group and a member of Volunteer and Community Activities Committee. Therefore, I am good in organizational skills and interpersonal & communication skills. My English is enough to communicate. I used to serve many foreign guests in English in the restaurant I worked.
I would appreciate the opportunity to speak with you and demonstrate more fully how my qualifications can meet your needs and benefit your organization, so please do not hesitate to contact me. I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Sincerely,
Gemina Mai
11 NZ Street
PN district, HCM City
November 27, 2013
X Hotel
23 HA Street
District 1, HCM City
Dear Human Resources Department:
I am a last-year student of Tourism Mannagement major at the Y University
In order to gain practical experience in a real environment and to apply the knowledge learned to life, I wish to perform a three-month internship in a professional five-star hotel like X Hotel. I would like to ask whether there might be a place available in the hotel from December 23, 2013 to April, 2014.
With knowledge about Tourism Management in Hospitality field in the university and the time working as a waitress at Z Restaurant, I am eager to contribute my abilities and experience to X Hotel. Besides, I used to work as a salesman at the Maxi Shoe shop.
In the university, I used to be the deputy of External Relations Department of Travel Group and a member of Volunteer and Community Activities Committee. Therefore, I am good in organizational skills and interpersonal & communication skills. My English is enough to communicate. I used to serve many foreign guests in English in the restaurant I worked.
I would appreciate the opportunity to speak with you and demonstrate more fully how my qualifications can meet your needs and benefit your organization, so please do not hesitate to contact me. I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Sincerely,
Gemina Mai
Top answer
It's very well written. In the second to last paragraph, I would make the following changes: Place the before the names of the organisations. My English is enough to communicate.
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It's very well written. 
In the second to last paragraph, I would make the following changes:
Place the before the n
In the second to last paragraph, I would make the following changes:Place the before the n
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Oh. These seem to be necessary changes.
Thank you so much for your contributions!
Thank you so much for your contributions!
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Sorry, organisations that you said are External Relations Department of Travel Group and Volunteer and Community Activities Committee, right?
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