Peek Posted 13 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
can you check my short story.
I was just passing through and thought to stop by Allison's house. I walked into the doorstop and rang the bell. I paused momentarily, and knock on the door. I had to do it few times. But no one answered. She must be here, because her car was in the garage. She never goes anyway without her car. So I decide to get into the house through the kitchen window. As soon as I get into the kitchen, I heard a noise. It is as if someone is mourning. I headed to her room right away. She was lying on the bed. Her face paled, and she is not looking good. Suddenly, I saw a shadow in the window. Someone was peering through the window, and at that instant, I heard police car pulling over the outside house. Looks like the neighbor saw I had got into the house through the window, must have thought I was a theft, and called the cops. Unfortunately, for me, I almost got arrested that day. but not for my friend. I saved her life. That day will live in my memory as long as I live.
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I was just passing through and thought to stop by Allison's house. I walked into [up] to the doorstop doorstep and rang the bell. I paused momentarily suggest briefly , and knock knocked on the door.
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I was just passing through and thought to stop by Allison's house. I walked into [up] to the doorstop doorstep and rang the bell. I paused momentarily suggest briefly , and knock knocked on the door. I had to do it knocked few several times. But
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(I got a paper bag and breathe hard) does this make sense PLEASE Help
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No it doesn't, and neither does hijacking someone else's thread with an unrelated question.
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Thanks. I appreciate your help. it's a great encouragement, and can you kindly check this short passage too.
I was walking along the sidewalk, and sun was peeping out from the clouds. It was about 6.00 AM, and was getting light as usual. I saw two kids were fighting with each other about their breakfast. The conflicts between those two kids were getting more and more often, not only at th
I was walking along the sidewalk, and sun was peeping out from the clouds. It was about 6.00 AM, and was getting light as usual. I saw two kids were fighting with each other about their breakfast. The conflicts between those two kids were getting more and more often, not only at th
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I was walking along the sidewalk, and the sun was peeping out from the clouds. It was about 6.00 AM a.m., and the sky was getting light as usual. I saw two kids were fighting with each other (unnecessary) about over their breakfast food.
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Do not hijack
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