Both of which

Question

Could you please tell me whether the usage of "both of which" is correct in the paragraph below?

Having taken “General Psychology” and “Social Psychology”, both of which I have obtained A- in, in the first two semesters and “Cognitive Psychology” in the summer semester, I have developed great interest in psychology.

Is the following correct as well?

Having taken “General Psychology” and “Social Psychology”, which I have obtained A- in both courses, in the first two semesters and “Cognitive Psychology” in the summer semester, I have developed great interest in psychology

Which is better in terms of elegance and conciseness?

Thank you indeed.

Mister Micawber · Accepted Answer

Having taken “General Psychology” and “Social Psychology”, both of which I have obtained A- in, in the first two semesters and “Cognitive Psychology” in the summer semester, I have developed great interest in psychology.-- 'Of which' and 'have obtained..in' are a clash of registers here, since the first is formal and the second is informal.

Is the following correct as well?-- No.

Which is better in terms of elegance and conciseness?-- Elegance is something that authors aim for, not resume writers; it should merely be clear and concise, but yours is not particularly so. By commenting on your good grades in the first 2 subjects, the reader can only suppose that you received a poor grade in the third one. If you wish your reader to reach the end of your sentence, try something like this:

I have taken courses in General, Social and Cognitive Psychology and developed a great interest in this field.

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