Bashyal Shisir Posted 4 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?

There is a trend that people are shifting towards satisfactory job over the big salary job. However, some people believe that high wage is most essential factor for them to choose their job over the work gratification. I completely disagree with this believe and this essay will argue why job pleasure is more important than higher salary.

It is true that main factor people get a job used to earn money. Nevertheless, if there is no job satisfaction, mental stress com along with it can destroy anyone's harmony in life. Recent research has found that 78% of employees in IT department is suffering from stress related diseases. The main reason of this is they were working only for money. Earning capital is essential for livelihood but not above your mental health.

On the other hand, employee can only reach to the maximum potential, if they do what they like. For instance, Piyush Bansal a founder and CEO of lENSKART has abandon his regular job despite earning a solid salary and pursue his dream of being an entrepreneur. He believes eyecare should be available all over India with affordable price and he is successfully providing eyecare products and services to the local people. This is only able to happen because he chooses job satisfaction over money.

To conclude, satisfaction in the job place major role in the selection of job rather than the high payment. Most importantly, employees will be happier and can be potentially reached to the top in his work.

  

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Please do not put the essay instructions in the "Subject" line.
Put it with your answer in the message body.

Subject: Please review my IELTS essay

Message body:
Topic: Copy the essay instructions accurately here.

My essay:

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You wrote 248 words. You lose points for not writing at least 250. Aim for 270-290.


Bashyal Shisir Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?

That is not good English. You must copy the instructions accurately.


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I have to break my comments into several posts because the system is having technical difficulties with long posts.

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There is a trend that people are shifting towards satisfactory job over the big salary job. (There is no information about a trend in the task instructions. Focus only on the task. Besides, I doubt that this is a true statement.)

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However, some people believe that a high wage is most important aspect of their job, more so than essential factor for them to choose their job over the work (that is not good English. It is not about choosing a job that you already have. ) gratification. I completely disagre

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It is true (Those are useless filler words. They add no content at all to the sentence. They are a distraction.) that The main factor (wrong word.) reason that people get a job used (wrong word.)

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To conclude, satisfaction on the job place (wrong word ) should be the major decision role in the selection of one's job