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AndyAstronaut Posted 21 years ago
Letter Writing

Application letter for a nursery school -

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00We would like to enroll our son in an English nursery school - admission is very difficult (at this age!!). Though we belive our English is acceptable for normal communication, we are not too sure about formal letter writing. We appreciate any corrections/tips/help. Thank you very much02br
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00Martha02br
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01i00_______________________________________02i02br
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00Martha and Koti Ramas02br
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00Debonstr. 4502br
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00St. Paul´s School02br
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00We would like to apply for our son´s admission to your nursery school in 2007. Our son´s name is Jamshed and he is 16 months old. 02br
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00After having spoken to a friend of ours, Dr. Ravi Chandra, whose children are attending St. Paul´s, we believe your school can provide a good and stimulating environment for our son. Dr. Chandra suggested that we contact you early on, due to the growing demand for enrollment in the nursery school. 02br
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00An important motivation for selecting a multinational school is our personal background. My husband Koti was born in India (his mother is Indian) and raised in China, where he visited an international school. Our family and many of our friends are spread all over the world - India, Britain, United States, Australia and Singapore - so English has become the 01i00de facto02i00 lingua franca. Apart from the language aspect, we believe that an early exposure to another culture is particularly helpful for a young child. 02br
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00Should you have any further questions, please do not hesitate to contact us at the above address or by phone at (1234) 5678. We thank you for considering our application, and we look forward to hearing from you soon. 02br
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0 Hello, and welcome to English Forums.02br
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00 You have posted in a text that is difficult for me to edit. Could you please re-post in plain text?02br
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0Hello,02br
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00sorry for causing this inconvenience. I hope the text is easier to edit now. Thanks very much for your efforts02br
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0 Very nicely done, actually-- just a couple of cosmetic changes. The date and everything else is now seen more commonly against the left margin. Good luck getting your son into this school.02br
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0Thanks a lot for your feedback - it is very helpful. To be honest, I had to spend a lot of time putting the letter together, and I am of course very pleased to receive your positive feedback. I wish you and your team all the very best and good luck for the future -02br
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Thank you for the above format. It has been very very helpful to us.

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