Another opinion from me. Can anyone correct it?

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women?A friend asked ," Why is the word 'women' started from 'w'?" he answer it his self " Because almost all of Question words are started from 'w' as well " . I think women will smile if they hear that statement.Women can be something misterious for men. However, no men really understand what women wants. For some men, women can be very confusing. I have read an article which is written by a man. In that article, written that, there are many contradiction things in what women do. Most women like childs, but they can suffer babyblues syndrome as well. Many women said "This problem makes me too tired to cry" while crying. Many women like in wearing sexy dress but they will be angry if a man touch them. Women are always with their friends, wherever they are, even in toilet. For some men this is so weird. All of that contradictions, I think refer to one think, difference.Difference between men and women is very obvious. So, what men think will be different with  women think.In the book which is written by John Gray, "men are from mars women are from venus" is mentioned that men and women have their own language. Men always talk about what's important to talk to. Women always talk to reveal what they feel. It means that the dominant things in women is emotion. What women and men should do, to have nice relationship, especially for them who have been living for long time together (wife and husband), is understand each other, so they will have great live.that's another opinion from me.  Please correct it, and give your opinion too .thx

Student charly · Accepted Answer

Mmmm. what's your question in fewer words?

Ilma · Answer

My question is grammars. I mean, I want anyone correct this for me, especially for grammars which is used in my writing. Do you get me ?
thx
ilma

Free_spirit · Answer

A friend asked, "Why is the word 'women' started with 'w'?" He answer it [for] himself, "Because almost all of question words are started from 'w' as well." I think women will smile if they hear that statement.
Women can be something mysterious for men. However, men don't really understand what women want. For some men, women can be very confusing. I have read an article that
was written by a man. In that article, he wrote that there are many contradictory things that women do. Most women like children, but they can suffer "baby blues" syndrome as well. Many women said, "this problem makes me too tired to cry," while crying. Many women like in wearing a **** dress, but they will be angry if a man touches them. Women are always with their friends, wherever they are, even in toilet. For some men this is so weird. All of these things are contradictions, which I think refer to one thing: difference.

The difference between men and women is very obvious. So, what men think will be different than what women think.
In the book "Men Are From Mars, Women Are From Venus", which is written by John Gray, it is mentioned that men and women have their own language. Men always talk about what's important to talk about. Women always talk to reveal what they feel. It means that the dominant thing in women is emotion.
What women and men should do, to have nice relationship, especially for those who have been living for a long time together (wife and husband), is understand each other, so they will have great lives.

Other suggestions:

Condense some of your sentences, e.g.
I have read an article, which was written by a man, that suggests that there are many contradictory things that women do.

All and all, a great composition. It could also do with a separating into paragraphs a little better. I haven't attempted this, and only made some corrects to the grammar. Keep up the good work, you are very thoughtful!

Oneandonly · Answer

I've made four corrections of free_spirit's text . Here they are:

- Removed the comma after "should do". I took "especially for... (wife and husband)" as apposition.
- Replaced "is understand" with "is to understand".
- Replaced "to have nice relationship" with "to have a nice relationship".
- Replaced "other, so they" with "and they".

What women and men should do to have nice a relationship, especially for those who have been living for a long time together (wife and husband), is to understand each other and they will have great lives.

Oneandonly · Answer

I can not edit my post any more, so I make a double post. I corrected some other things. Also I arranged the text to be more readable. Not all of them were mistakes, but I think that the text can be understood easier now.

If a moderator reads this topic, merge my posts, please.

New corrections:

- Replaced "a friend asked" with "a friend of mine asked".
- Replaced "Why is the word 'women' started with 'w'?" with "Why does the word 'women' start with 'w'?".
- Replaced "Because almost all of question words are started from 'w'" with "Because almost all question words start with 'w'."
- Removed "as well".
- Replaced "All of these things are contradictions, which I think refer to one thing: difference. " with "All these things are contradictions and I think that they lead to one thing: difference."
- Added the corrections from my above post.

The full text, corrected:

A friend of mine asked: "Why does the word 'women' start with 'w'?"
He answered it for himself" "Because almost all question words start with 'w'."

I think women will smile if they hear that statement.

Women can be something mysterious for men. However, men don't really understand what women want. For some men, women can be very confusing. I have read an article that
was written by a man. In that article, he wrote that there are many contradictory things that women do. Most women like children, but they can suffer "baby blues" syndrome as well. Many women said, "this problem makes me too tired to cry," while crying. Many women like wearing a **** dress, but they will be angry if a man touches them. Women are always with their friends, wherever they are, even in toilet. For some men this is so weird. All these things are contradictions and I think that they lead to one thing: difference.

The difference between men and women is very obvious. So, what men think is different than what women think.

In the book "Men Are From Mars, Women Are From Venus", which is written by John Gray, it is mentioned that men and women have their own language. Men always talk about what's important to talk about. Women always talk to reveal what they feel. It means that the dominant thing in women is emotion.

What women and men should do to have nice relationship, especially for those who have been living for a long time together (wife and husband), is to understand each other and they will have great lives.

Another opinion from me. Can anyone correct it?

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