Contiluo Posted 11 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
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The following paragraph is written by a student. I find it no errors, and think it is a good article. Is there anything to improve? Thanks!
Jessica Jung is the singer I like. She has big eyes, a prominent nose, a small mouth and an oval face. She is very slim but not tall. Her appearance attracts many fans, but that’s not the real reason why I like her. Her soft voice is the first reason. When I am enjoying her songs, the songs are pleasant to hear. I really like her voice! The second reason is that she is not only a singer, but also a designer, too. She has talent on designing things. Her designs are gorgeous. She put a lot of efforts on things she loves and keeps doing these things. In my eyes, she is a wonderful person. I really like her!
Jessica Jung is the singer I like. She has big eyes, a prominent nose, a small mouth and an oval face. She is very slim but not tall. Her appearance attracts many fans, but that’s not the real reason why I like her. Her soft voice is the first reason. When I am enjoying her songs, the songs are pleasant to hear. I really like her voice! The second reason is that she is not only a singer, but also a designer, too. She has talent on designing things. Her designs are gorgeous. She put a lot of efforts on things she loves and keeps doing these things. In my eyes, she is a wonderful person. I really like her!
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contiluo I find it no errors, I find that it has no errors,
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contiluoJessica Jung is the singer I like.Do you mean that there is only one singer that you like? If so, you should make that clear, before writing the above.
If you don't mean that, it would be better to write: Jessica Jung is a singer that I like.
contiluoHer appearance attracts many fans, but that’s n
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